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glen

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I have some edit questions I'm wondering about:

 

Brady, 35, was miffed that the Jaguars, whose blocking skills were lauded by coach Jack Del Rio, only offered him a $1.5 million contract with no signing bonus for the upcoming season.

From: Brady to accept Patriots' offer

Is it okay to have "Jaguars, whose blocking skills" since it is clear whose is about Brady?

 

He only produced three runs of over 20 yards and lacks the big-play ability that made him a special player. He will receive some play on the open market, but teams should realize their getting a shell of the player he once was.

From: Bust and bargains - Evaluating overrated and underrated free agents

Is "teams should realize their getting a shell of the player" okay since it would be their shell, or should it be "teams should realize they're getting a shell of the player"?

 

Effectively, I had played nobody for the heart ace.

Should "Effectively" be "essentially" since his play was not effective (as in produce a desired effect), or is it okay as in produce an impression?

 

A source said today that the Dolphins are shopping Randy McMichael, who is the franchise's all-time leader in catches (283) and receiving yards (3,096) for a tight end.

From: Dolphins trying to trade TE McMichael

 

They are not "shopping Randy McMichael ... for a tight end." but instead he is "all-time leader ... for a tight end." Was the sentence okay?

 

Thanks in advance for comments.

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1. As written, it's the Jaguars as a whole whose blocking skills have been praised.

 

2. Should be "they're". No excuses!

 

3. "Effectively" is fine. In this context it means "in effect": it has nothing to do with whether it was effective.

 

4. If they were shopping him for a tight end, there would be a comma before "for". So technically the sentence is unambiguously correct. However the writer might have considered recasting the sentence to make life easier for the reader.

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Thanks for the answers!

 

The Tampa Bay Buccaneers signed free-agent quarterback Jeff Garcia on Saturday and obtained the rights to Jake Plummer from Denver, adding two quarterbacks to compete with Chris Simms next season.

Effectively, is it fair to have three quarterbacks in the same sentence, if each of them thinks they should be starting the sentence?

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